Webnauts Net Academy would appreciate review

Webnauts · #1 (**permalink**) 10-18-2005, 08:57 PM

Our brand new and only of its kind "Certified Web Accessibility Consultant (CWAC)" instructor guided and accessible online training program, was launched yesterday.

We provide there features as accessible chatrooms, accessible links lists to valuable resources on the Web, and accessible forums.

It is created for web site designers and managers, search engine optimization practitioners and others involved in the development or maintenance of web sites. A secondary audience is researchers who investigate Web design issues.

Therefore, we would appreciate very much if you would take some minutes to review our public area, and tell us what you think we can do better there: http://academy.webnauts.net

Thanks a lot in advance for your kind contribution.

Allen · #2 (**permalink**) 10-19-2005, 08:34 PM

looks good! - the only possible addition would be adding the prices to this page... i had to hunt for them and they were not really called out in a color or bold...

btw - i am taking some german language classes and everything in the book is about bielefeld!

curtiss · #3 (**permalink**) 10-20-2005, 08:08 PM

It certainly looks nice. The copywriting could use a little work, though. The opening sentence is long, rambling, and rather difficult to understand. I would find a way to break it up, and re-word it.

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The brand new and only one of its kind "Certified Web Accessibility Consultant (CWAC)" instructor guided and accessible online training program, with features as accessible chats, accessible links lists to valuable resources on the Web and accessible forums, is created for web site designers and managers, search engine optimization practitioners and others involved in the development or maintenance of web sites.

Webnauts · #4 (**permalink**) 10-21-2005, 12:08 PM

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Originally Posted by curtiss

It certainly looks nice. The copywriting could use a little work, though. The opening sentence is long, rambling, and rather difficult to understand. I would find a way to break it up, and re-word it.

As you may see, and I am aware of, my English is not excellent. Could you give me a hand with that? I knew the problem you mention, but I could not figure that out.

By the way, thank you very much for the review. Very appreciated!

curtiss · #5 (**permalink**) 10-21-2005, 01:42 PM

Try something like:

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The "Certified Web Accessibility Consultant (CWAC)" training program is a brand new, one-of-a-kind resource for web-related professionals. The program is guided by an instructor, and is completely accessible online. Some features include lists of valuable web-based resources, forums, and chats dealing with accessibility. This program is engineered specifically for web site designers, managers, SEO practitioners and anyone else involved in the development or maintenance of web sites.

It may still require a little "punching-up", but it's at least a bit easier to comprehend.